OK. The next few posts will be poems I wrote this weekend. Let me know, honestly, what you think, please. If it's terrible, tell me. That's how I'll get better. Thanks! (Also, all titles are made up spur of the moment, and are probably worse than the poems themselves. Don't let that discourage you from reading them. lol)

And the drums beat ever faster
(Boom boom-boom boom-boom)
And we all move ever onward
Marching toward our doom

And our hope carries us further
(Boom boom-boom boom-boom)
And a wish of love does spurn us
As the drums go on

Faster, faster, faster still
(Boom boom-boom boom-boom)
And we march toward sure heartbreak
Hoping for a change

And will we ever get our chance
(Boom boom-boom boom-boom)
For a love that defies the odds?
Will we all give up?

And the drums are never ending
(Boom boom-boom boom-boom)
And we all march ever onward
And we are forced to choose.

i like this one the best of the three.
» thaitanic on 2010-05-10 03:25:28

Why?
I know my sister said the middle one was too sad, but she didn't read the third one, so I don't have any input on that one. It was my first attempt at maintaining a themed metaphor throughout a poem.
» squid on 2010-05-10 04:54:22

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